Like when your writing something down for instance. In your mind you know what to say and how to spell the words, but on paper you spell the words wrong and you skip some words you were going to write. That makes you have to erase a lot. And try to remember what you were going to say again. Hopefully next week, we will have more writing prompts and more attention-getting ones too! January 28, 2012.

In order to improve my paragraph, I included another example that relates to the topic. Reflection on My Week One Writing.

The real 9th week review. Well I can say that this paragraphg was origanaly a summary so there is alot of room for improvement hope you guys like it. This is the second to last pargrapgh of my essay. Should it end with his survival or his death? March 11, 2012.

I could have added more supports and examples by writing down a PIE chart for this essay. I would probably have more sufficient points and examples. The problem I think I had with tying my thoughts into the actual theme of the story was that I really never focused on the theme itself. It is evident I was more worried about my word choice rather than incorporating the theme into my writing. I noticed in my composition books my spelling was not the best.

For my Greek analysis essay I think I could have improved my paragraphs by adding more descriptive words. Looking back at my original essay I can tell that I used pretty basic words while writing. With that I am going to try and make my paragraph more interesting my using extraordinary word choice and adding a collosal amount of support.